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Band 5.5

You have finished a course. Write a letter to the course organizer to give your feedback. In your letter include: - the details of the course, - what you enjoyed during the course, - any suggestions you would have.

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Dear
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course
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 Director, First of all , I would like to express my gratitude for organizing
cooking
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a cooking
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course
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 for students who are unable to pay expensive fees . Personally, I was enrolled in
this
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course
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 on 22
march
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March
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, the
last
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 session . Positively chuffed ! The staff was so
co-operative
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cooperative
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 and helpful .
Also
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 , the beginner
course
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 was included practical sessions with group teams manifestly enjoyable .
Moreover
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 , I achieved my goal of learning how to cook delicious and healthy cuisines through your
course
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 .
However
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 , there is nothing to rectify but I want to suggest something about classes which needs to
be alter
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.
Such
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 as timing of the classes during the weekends should be between 11am to 3 pm . The reason behind
this
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that
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is that
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mostly
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most
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family
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families
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is
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are
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 on off and your organisation opens from 7 am to 1 pm which creates disturbance to others when we try to get ready or do other things. I would be grateful to you that you provide
such
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 good classes for preparing meals . Yours faithfully, Kamal

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your feedback into clearer paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea for better readability.
task achievement
Make sure to maintain a formal tone throughout the letter, especially in the suggestions section.
task achievement
Your appreciation for the course and the positive feedback about the staff and practical sessions were well expressed.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion nicely sums up your gratitude and relevance to the topic.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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