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the maps show the centre of a small town called Islip as it now, and plans for its redevelopment.

the maps show the centre of a small town called Islip as it now, and plans for its redevelopment.
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The maps give detailed information about the process of
renovation
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small
Correct article usage
a small
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 town called Islip for future development.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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on the
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 maps, we can see a big change between
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the
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present and
future
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the future
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.
For instance
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, they are going to improve the north side of the shops
,
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apply
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 and construct there 4 new places:
Bus
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a Bus
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 station, Shopping
center
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centre
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, Car park,
New
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and New
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 housing.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, Islip inhabitants going to change the south part of the map to add to
this
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 side
new
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a new
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road
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 and replace
school
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the school
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into
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with
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 housing
accomodation
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accommodation
 and
Dual
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a Dual
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 carriageway and park. Looking at the details,
in
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apply
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the first picture
depict
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depicts
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that
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the
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, current state of Islip town, north and south piece shops and the main
road
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. And
also
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, the northwest part, school and front side park with housing. In the second image which is
plan
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a plan
the plan
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 for
a
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the
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 future
tiwn
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town
, 4 different areas in the north. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that,
pedestrains
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pedestrians
pedestrian
road
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 only will
be build
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be built
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then
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than
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 that of
main
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the main
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road
Use synonyms
. School and housing will not
changes
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change
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.
However
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, some parts of housing have some
chages
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changes
 like new housing.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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