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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities
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The maps illustrate how the Island
looking
Wrong verb form
looked
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 in 1980 and after following
of
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apply
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the tourist
facilities
Use synonyms
.
Overall
Linking Words
,
while
Linking Words
west
Correct article usage
the west
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 of the
facilities
Use synonyms
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 unchanged,
boardwalk
Correct article usage
the boardwalk
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 and
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
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new
facilities
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 are added to the map. In the year 1980, the island had a few
facilities
Use synonyms
 which were
accommodation
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accommodations
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among
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on
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 the footpath.In front of the sea that can be seen restaurant,and there is a reception among the vehicle track.
Moreover
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, in the east of the beach, you can see the trees. After reconstruction, the beach
see
Wrong verb form
saw
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 a number of significant changes.As for the new development is the addition of shops and restaurants.
Furthermore
Linking Words
,
boardwalk
Correct article usage
the boardwalk
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make
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makes
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easier
Correct pronoun usage
it easier
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 to reach
another
Replace the adjective
another facility
other facilities
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facilities
Use synonyms
.
Eastern
Add an article
The eastern
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 side of the beach accommodation
removed
Add a missing verb
was removed
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 to make a pool. North of the pool
,
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is, diving
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diving
Correct article usage
the diving
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 school . Among the boardwalk the apartment and trees took place.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words facilities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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