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The maps below show changes to the ground floor plan of a university department in 1980 and 2010

The maps below show changes to the ground floor plan of a university department in 1980 and 2010
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The two maps illustrate the main changes which
has
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 been expanded at the
university
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 in the years 1980 and 2010.
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,
it is clear that
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 the
university
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 has become much more modernized over 2010, with a larger car park and IT
center
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 facility. Looking at the map in more detail, we can see that, in 1980, the main entrance has been located of
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university
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the university
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 on the south and
has been
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apply
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had
bigger
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a bigger
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 junction road (T-intersection) on the
east to
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east-to
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 west and the south
side
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. The
university
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of
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rooms have been situated seminar room opposite the
library
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, and
office
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the office
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 and S2
across
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 from S3. These among have had corridor. The five trees have been had on the northeast
side
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. In 2010, the main entrance and junction road (T-intersection) have been unchanged.
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 modern car park has been built on the east
side
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 of the main entrance. The office has been expanded and the
library
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 has been removed. S1 and S3 rooms have remained. Two new rooms have been added S4 and S5 on the north
side
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. The
library
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 and IT
center
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centre
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 have been built
instead
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 of trees to the northeast. There is a corridor between the
library
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 and the IT
center
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centre
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, side, library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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