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Your local bookshop has invited members of the public to recommend a guest speaker for an upcoming event that will include a series of talks from well-known people. Write an e-mail to the bookshop. In your e-mail: • suggest a speaker • say what they would contribute to the event • explain why other people would be interested too

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Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well! I am
writng
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writing
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 letter to suggest a guest speaker for an upcoming
event
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 . Since you are organizing an
event
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 for your bookshop so, I will recommend a very successful author. His name is Sunil Shah you must have heard his name. Sunil Shah is my dearest uncle and I have personally witnessed his success based on that I can assure you he has a lot to speak out
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 Till now he has written more than 15 books covering almost all genres.
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, he has been awarded over two national awards. His diversity in different genres makes him a perfect and interesting speaker for the audience
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 reporters attending your
event
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. He can talk about his very recent book "Ikigai" which covers the essence of life.
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, he can educate young audiences on how to start a journey as an author.
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I am
 sure you will find him interesting. If you are interested in inviting him as a guest speaker, please let me know. I would share his personal contact details. See you soon at the
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, Smith

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Grammar and Spelling
Check for spelling mistakes and typos (e.g., 'writng' should be 'writing' and 'Yours' is incorrectly written).
Coherence
Provide a clearer introduction that states the purpose of your email more directly.
Coherence
Include a concluding sentence to wrap up your email pleasantly and formally.
Cohesion
Use transition phrases to connect ideas more effectively (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Additionally').
Task Achievement
The choice of speaker, Sunil Shah, is compelling and relevant, showcasing a personal connection which adds authenticity to the recommendation.
Coherence
The email has a friendly and engaging tone, which is suitable for the context of a bookshop event.

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