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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter - describe what you enjoyed about the course -say how much cooking you've done since the course - suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Kristina mam, I hope you find
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 enjoyed very much
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 the part when we had to make noodles by ourselves. As a person who just converted to vegan, I always missed Italian foods as they do not have many options for us but the recipes you suggest and all the
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 which you suggest were really helpful. From that day to now
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 always made those dishes at least once a week. I
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 heard that you want to expand your classes and add more courses. Well,
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 have a request for you,
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 would be grateful if you start baking lectures
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 focusing on
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 and pastries as it is hard to find them. Let me know if you start Vegan baking classes,
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 would be the first one to join them as I know it will be as great as
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 one. Thank you.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider structuring your paragraphs more clearly by ensuring each paragraph has a single main idea. For example, your enjoyment of the course and suggestions for future courses could be separated into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Make sure to use formal greetings and closings in your letters. For instance, change 'Kristina mam' to 'Dear Ms. Kristina' for a more professional tone.
task achievement
You might want to provide more specific details about the cooking techniques you learned to enhance your feedback. This would demonstrate a deeper engagement with the course material.
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You clearly express your enjoyment of the course and how it has impacted your cooking habits, which shows genuine engagement with the topic.
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Your suggestion for a new course reflects a thoughtful consideration of the needs of other students, showcasing your understanding of the audience.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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