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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
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apply
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pie charts show where a US children’s charity
get
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got
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money
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 from and how they
spend
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spent
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 it in 2016.
Overall
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, most of the
money
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come
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comes
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 from donated food, and the biggest part of spending
go
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goes
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 to
program
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 services. Other sources of
money
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 and spending are much smaller. One main thing to notice is that donated food
make
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makes
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 up most of the revenue, at 86.6%. Community contribution is much lower at 10.4%. Other
source
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sources
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 like
program
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 revenue, investment income, government grants, and other income
is
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are
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 all less than 1%. In spending, most
money
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 was
use
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used
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 for
program
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 services (95.6%),
while
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 fundraising and management take much smaller parts, 2.6% and 1.8%. Comparing both, the charity
use
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uses
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 most of its
money
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 to help with
program
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 services, which is a good thing. Fundraising and management
cost
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costs
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 are not big, which
show
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shows
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 they don’t waste
money
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. The total income and spending are close, so they handle
money
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 well.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, program with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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