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Band 4

To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumptions?

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Nowadays, environmental
treats
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threats
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 have been
incrasing
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increasing
 in the world.
However
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,
to
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apply
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rising
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raising
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 the cost of
fluel
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fuel
 is the best way to solve
this
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 problem. I
agree
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agree on
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this
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 view because the high
use
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 of
vehicalse
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vehicles
vehicle
 is a
cuase
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cause
case
 of global warming and to
increament
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increase
of
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in
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fuel
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 is the best solution for
this
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 issue. To start with, the
consumtion
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consumption
 of vehicles
have
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has
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 been increasing
a
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for a
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couple of decades. Automobile companies have developed
their
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apply
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new features
into
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in
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 the
cars
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 because market is demanding
it
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them
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.
Although
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 new
cars
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 have new comfort features
but
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apply
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this
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these
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is
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are
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 producing a lot of
corbon
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carbon
 dioxide which is the cause of
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the envoronmental
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envoronmental
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environmental
 crisis. For
intance
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instance
, one
articale
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article
had
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apply
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published in the BBC news they had showed
that
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apply
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how new SUV
cars
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 had new
thechnology
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technology
 like their fast
batary
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battery
 power but
also
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this
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ennovation
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innovation
renovation
 of
cars
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are
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is
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 the only
one
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apply
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element which
are
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is
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produsing
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producing
27% of
carboun
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carbon
. A lot of consumption of SUV
carse
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cars
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are
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is
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 becoming strong
reasons
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reason
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of
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for
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 global warming. On the
second
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other
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 hand, new technical innovation has influenced
on
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apply
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people's consumption.
Moreover
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, they want to make their life faster and more comfortable through
this
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use
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 of
cars
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consequently
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 they are the
responsor
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response
sponsor
of
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for
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envoronmental
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environmental
hazard
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hazards
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 and I believe that
to increase
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increasing
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 the price of
fuel
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 is the best
why
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way
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 to reduce
this
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 issue. When
fuel
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 has costly at
list
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least
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 people will think that they should reduce the
use
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 of vehicles or maybe they will
do
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make
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 priorities to save their money
as a result
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corbon
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carbon
 dioxide will not
incrase
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increase
in
coming
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the coming
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 days.
To conclude
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, the world
are
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is
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 leading by environmental problems and I
supported
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support
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 that the
fuel
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 cost increment is the best way to solve
this
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treat
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threat
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.When people
will thinks
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think
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the
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about the
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use
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 of high cost of
fuel
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then
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 definitely will reduce the
use
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 of vehicles as
result
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a result
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 they can not produce
harm
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harmful
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 carbon which is the cause of
invironmental
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environmental
hazard
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hazards
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Refine the introduction to clearly outline your main arguments and position.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure all sentences are grammatically correct to enhance clarity of ideas.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or data to support your claims about vehicles contributing to carbon emissions.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your conclusion succinctly summarizes your main arguments without introducing new points.
task achievement
You express a clear opinion on the issue of fuel price increases and environmental hazards.
task achievement
You have identified a relevant topic and made some effort to explain your thoughts on it.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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