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The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Umar

The pie chart below shows the frequency of U.S. Adults’ online purchasing habits in 2015, while the bar chart shows a further classification denoting online purchasing preferences. Umar
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The pie chart illustrates
about
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the regularity of
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the U.S
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U.S
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U.S.
The
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buying habits of
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elders
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 people in 2015, whilst the bar chart represents a future classification indicating online customer preferences.
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, a quarter of adults never shopped from the website,
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purchasers buy in physical stores.the highest and the lowest percentage of online and in real life were in one section. The highest percentage of inhabitants who bought a thing from websites
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 37%.
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quarter
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citizens
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the U.S
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U.S
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 never ordered anything, during the given period. 15% of residents acquired things
from
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online every week. 28 % of
individual
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individuals
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 spent money
to
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online every week. 28% spent money
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 online shops a few times a month. The lowest indicator of income
were
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 in less frequent online customers demonstrating more than 20%
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, the highest figure
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 section,approximately 82% of real clients. More physical sales were in monthly and all shopping
representing
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 almost the same.
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buy
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 online
were
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 less
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the same including all shoppers and monthly.In weekly
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 less than 40% in real and about 62% from orders.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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