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Writing Samples
Band 5

Write a letter to a friend about an item you borrowed last week, that accidentally got damaged. In your letter – Describe the item. – What was the damage? – What do you intend to do to rectify the problem?

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Dear Sim, I hope you are
your
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well. I am writing
this
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 letter to apologize for the mistake which I
had did
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made
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 yesterday.
Firstly
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, I want to say sorry for damaging the hair
curler
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. I will explain
you
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everything in detail, as you know my brother's wedding was organized in
very
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a very
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 short period of time. I
couldn't
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didn't
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had
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have
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 time to purchase the hair
curler
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 and that's why I borrowed
from
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it from
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 you
last
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 week. I knew that it was
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a dyson
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dyson
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Dyson
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curler
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 and
i
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I
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 had kept it in my wardrobe. Unfortunately, on
wedding
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the wedding
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 day
while
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 I was getting ready, we had
electric
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an electric
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 power shortage. Suddenly everything stopped working, I was in
middle
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the middle
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 of doing my
hair style
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hairstyle
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.  After that my father checked everything and we came to know that we had
pluged
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plugged
plunged
to
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too
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 many things
on
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into
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inverter
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the inverter
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. I don't know how I can be careless with eclectic equipment. But you don't need to get stressed I already gave
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curler
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the curler
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 to
electrician
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an electrician
the electrician
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. Fortunately, he said there
is
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was
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 no big damage and he
will
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would
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 fix it within two days. Hope you will understand the situation and will not be mad at me. I will be waiting for your reply. Yours lovely, Aam

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Grammar
Make sure to use correct verb tenses. For example, 'which I had did' should be 'which I did'.
Coherence
Try to avoid run-on sentences. Break them into shorter sentences for clarity.
Cohesion
Add a more formal greeting and closing to match the letter format better.
Task Achievement
You provided a clear explanation of the situation involving the borrowed item.
Task Achievement
Your tone is friendly and apologetic, which suits a letter to a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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