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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)
The bar chart illustrates the rate of customers from ten distinct nations who
are spend
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 the highest amounts on travel in 2014.
Overall
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, it is obvious that China's expenditure on travel is the highest,
while
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 Taiwan's expenditure is the lowest. It is
also
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 noteworthy that several states' expenses are identical.
It is clear that
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 five countries transfer
larger
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a larger
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 amount than the other five. Specifically, China,
United
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the United
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 States, Germany,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, and Singapore are included
on
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in
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this
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 category, amounting
for
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to
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 slightly above $100
billion
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, $82
billion
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, $82
billion
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, just under $60
billion
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, and slightly above $20
billion
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 respectively.
Whereas
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 the rest of the list
such
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 as Hongkong, South Korea, India, Malaysia, and Taiwan are ranked at the bottom, with $20
billion
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, $20
billion
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, just under $20
billion
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, nearly $20
billion
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, and $10
billion
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 each.
Additionally
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, it is
also
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 important that customers' expenses
of
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in
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four
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the four
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 countries are similar. Specifically, Germany and US
totaled
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totalled
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 the same
as well as
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 Hongkong and South Korea.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • spending
  • travel budgets
  • ranking
  • economy
  • consumer behavior
  • significant
  • notable
  • comparative analysis
  • patterns
  • habits
  • implications
  • spending habits
  • highest
  • highest-ranked
  • total expenditure
  • top-tier
  • lower-tier
  • economic status
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