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Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think the changes have been postitive, while others believe they have been negative. Discuss both these points of view and give your opinion.

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It is undeniable that nowadays life is completely different than in the past.
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, many people think that the
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 that we have had in our societies have been positive
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 others think the opposite. In
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 essay, I am going to discuss both points of view and give my personal opinion. It is a fact that many of the
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 that societies have had over the
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 have been beneficial for people’s
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.
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, sixty
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 ago most of the countries were under extreme poverty, but nowadays poverty rates have decreased in many of those states. As an example, Chilean statistics show that in 1990 50% of its population was under the standard income line, but by 2010 that percentage decreased to 10%.
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, a lot of states have developed themselves which has had a positive impact on their citizens thanks to the improvement of health, education and labour conditions.
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, progress in technology has improved people's
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 in many ways that
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 ago were unthinkable like creating a vaccine in two
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 to stop a global pandemic.
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, it is
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 true that many of the
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 have had a negative impact on society.
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 a big majority of nations have benefited themselves thanks to globalization, many others have not. Countries in Africa or South America have been left behind in
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 new economic global system.
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, climate change is affecting people's
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 in very concerning ways with cities where it is unbreathable because of pollution.
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, technology has allowed countries to create weapons that have the ability to destroy everything on its path.
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, there is a great fear that the conflict between Ukraine and Russia will end in a nuclear conflict. In conclusion, after discussing both points of view I have concluded that even though many of the
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 that humans have made in the past decades have given us terrible consequences, the majority of them have had a positive impact on making people’s
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 much better.

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task response
While your introduction clearly states the topic and your intention to discuss both views, try to make the thesis statement more explicit by briefly mentioning the positive and negative impacts. This will provide a clearer roadmap for your essay.
coherence and cohesion
In your body paragraphs, ensure that each point is distinctly separated and linked to the overall argument. A clear topic sentence for each paragraph will help enhance the flow and structure of your argument.
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You have used relevant examples to support your points, but including diverse perspectives or additional examples could strengthen your arguments further. Consider mentioning some specific technological advancements or positive societal changes in more detail.
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The essay presents a balanced view, discussing both the positive and negative aspects of modern lifestyles effectively.
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Your use of specific examples, such as the poverty rates in Chile, demonstrates a strong understanding of the changes discussed.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your points and provides a clear personal stance, enhancing your essay's overall coherence.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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