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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Assel.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Assel.
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The table and the charts
depicts
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 a picture
on
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of
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 the police
budget
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 in one area of Britain for the years 2017 and 2018, including the sources of funding and how the money was allocated.
Overall
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, the total police
budget
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 increased from 2017 to 2018.
While
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 salaries remained the biggest expenditure, their proportion decreased,
whereas
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 spending on technology saw a significant increase. Meanwhile, the
budget
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 for buildings and transport remained unchanged. The table shows the total police
budget
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 increased from £304.7
million
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 in 2017 to £318.6
million
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 in 2018 and the National Government rose from £175.5
million
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 in 2017 to £177.8
million
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 in 2018. Local taxes
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 increased significantly from £91.2
million
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 to £102.3
million
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,
while
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 other sources,
such
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 as grants, remained relatively stable at around £38
million
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.
According to
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 the second
charts
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chart
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, the majority of the
budget
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 was spent on salaries for officers and
staff
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the staff
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 proportion decreased from 75% in 2017 to 69% in 2018. Meanwhile, spending on technology increased from 8% to 14%.
In contrast
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, the
budget
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 for buildings and transport costs remained unchanged at 17% in both years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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