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Study abroad can be highly motivational for students and also inspire their dreams. However, whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students, there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the way. With this is in mind, it is more advantages to study at home. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is a trend seen
nowdays
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for going
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 abroad for
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higher studies.
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 practice
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 playing vital role in everyone's life as they feel motivated and it
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 to achieve their dreams. The given notion
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 merits and demerits as well. In
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fully agree
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given
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 outweigh
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 and foremost reason to support my view is that foreign countries give children exposure
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new
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 world as they study and work together.
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 practice makes them more independent because they are managing their studies and becoming financially stable. They pay their
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tuition
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 their own. Adding to
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abroad helps
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 to become
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 they do all their chores alone and become
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successful
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 the end.
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, there are other supporting points to support
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 notion is that
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 foreign schools and colleges concentrate more on practical knowledge rather than theoretical. In a survey conducted in 2024
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university
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 of
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 70%
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students
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of students
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favour of studying abroad
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 more beneficial than studying in
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their home
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 country.
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. There are some drawbacks as well. pupils
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 is
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the language
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 barrier . Some people
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 attached
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 family may feel
home sickness
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homesickness
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. The other negative impact is
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culture
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 barrier
their
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is
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 different people with different
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 its very difficult for
students
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 to adjust
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 their culture . But
students
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 can overcome these
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 of
problem
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 after some time . In conclusion ,
study
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 abroad
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positive
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 impact on
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students
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life
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students
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 may complete their dreams and
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 not only good for them but
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 for their families and
its
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it is
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proud
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a proud
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 moment for
family
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families
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The introduction could be clearer by presenting a more precise thesis statement. Make sure to clearly state your position on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to indicate the main idea. This helps guide the reader through your arguments.
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When discussing drawbacks, try to provide specific examples to strengthen your points and show a balanced view.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with punctuation and grammar to improve clarity and professionalism in your writing. For example, ensure proper sentence structure and correct spelling errors (e.g., 'tution' should be 'tuition').
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You have effectively identified both the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad and expressed your opinion clearly.
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Your arguments are relevant, and you provide a mix of practical and emotional reasons that enhance your essay.
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The effort to incorporate supporting data from a survey was a nice touch to bolster your argument in favor of studying abroad.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal growth
  • cultural exposure
  • critical thinking
  • independence
  • self-reliance
  • language acquisition
  • global job market
  • motivation
  • networking opportunities
  • culture shock
  • homesickness
  • academic pressure
  • financial constraints
  • support networks
  • mental health
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