IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter • describe the situation. • explain why it bothers you. • suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear Mr. Bing, I hope
this
Linking Words
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
Linking Words
 letter to draw your attention as I have been struggling with the parking problem for a month. Let me explain my situation to you. Even though the management has allotted the designated parking reservations for the dwellers, I, am somehow unable to get my reserved space. Whenever I returned home after finishing my work, I often could not find the empty space to park my four-wheeler. I called many times to the management regarding
this
Linking Words
 problem but, they did not pay enough attention to it. To my knowledge, guests who visit their dear ones, often park their vehicles wherever they find the spot.
Hence
Linking Words
,
This
Linking Words
 might be the reason behind the occupied parking area.
Due to
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
, I have to drive my car far away searching for other empty locations despite having my private parking daily. I request you to talk to the building manager as he is your family friend so, they may consider your kind words about
this
Linking Words
 scenario. In my opinion, We can request the residents and the authorities to design the visitor's parking area beside the playground.
Also
Linking Words
, make a strict rule for the residents and their guests. Failing to follow the rule, may receive the ticket.
This
Linking Words
 might help resolve the parking problem. I hope to hear from you soon. Kind regards, Kayara.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Consider reorganizing your paragraphs to enhance flow. A more logical progression of ideas would strengthen the overall coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Be mindful of punctuation in your sentences. Removing unnecessary commas will help improve readability and clarity.
task response
Make your suggestions clearer and more direct. Providing specific examples can make your solutions more persuasive.
task achievement
You effectively express your feelings regarding the parking issue, which adds a personal touch to your letter.
task achievement
Your tone is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for a letter to your landlord.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: