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The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the results of surveys in 2005, 2010 and 2015 about McGill University. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates
results
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the results
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 of a survey evaluating five
student
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services
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 in McGill
university
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University
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 in the years 2005, 2010, and 2015.
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, it is clear from the table that
student
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services
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 recorded the highest rate
by
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in
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 2015,
while
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 the range of modules offered received the lowest among all other
services
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. Meanwhile,
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 and social facilities rate did not change over time.
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 with, the top three highest-rated
services
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by
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 2015 were
student
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services
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 (95), library resources (87), and teaching quality (78). To illustrate,
student
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services
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 had increased significantly from 54 in 2005 to 95 by 2015.
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, library resources compared to
student
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services
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 had a slight fluctuation, increasing from 86 to 88 by 2010 before settling at 87 in 2015.
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, teaching quality increased from 74 in 2005 to 78 by 2015.
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, the two lowest-rated
services
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 were
range
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the range
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 of modules offered and sports and social facilities.
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While Range
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The range
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 of modules offered showed a decrease from 39 in 2005 to 25 by 2015, making it the lowest-rated service.
In contrast
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,
sport
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sports
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 and social facilities showed no variation at 65 throughout the period, indicating no improvement in the service.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words student, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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