The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical aplliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housheholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical aplliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housheholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs
gives
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imformation
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information
about the proportion of households who own washing
machine
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machines
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,
refridgerator
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refrigerators
, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, alongside the number of
hours
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spent doing homework per
week
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in a single country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, the proportion of electric appliances owned by houses has significantly increased over the time period,
whereas
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,
hours
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spent on
household
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chores followed a downward trend.
Firstly
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, the
ownership
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of electric devices followed an increased trend
during
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the years. In 1920,
washing
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the washing
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machine was the most owned electric items
at
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with about 40% across
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the household
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household
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households
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, second by vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, at approximately 30%
ownership
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,
this
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figures gradually increased over the years, peaking at 70% in 1960, before declining in washing machine percentage to around 65% in 1980,
then
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slowly increased to 69% approximately in 2019.
Whereas
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vacumm
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vacuum
cleaner skyrocketed to 100%
ownership
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in
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household
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households
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in 2019.
However
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,
in contrast
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to electric
appliances
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appliance
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ownership
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, number of housework done in a
week
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experianced
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experienced
a decreased trend. In 1920, house chores were done at around 50
hours
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per
week
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,
this
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was followed
a
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sharp
fell
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to just below 20
hours
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per
week
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in 1960
,
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and remained relatively stable at about 10
hours
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a
week
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in 2019. Albeit there was no record of
refridgerator
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refrigerator
ownership
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in 1920, there was a massive display of usage in 1940, with around 55% of
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household
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households
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, which continued to increase, reaching 100% of
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household
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households
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in 2019.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, household, ownership with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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