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Band 3.5

You bought a product online, but it was not as described. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: •Explain the issue with the product. •Describe what you expected instead. •State what you want the company to do to resolve the problem.

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Hello Mr. Jeo I want to tell you about your product which
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 brought from your website by
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 platform. My product was
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 music screen for my car accord 2008 LX model. My order number was 2730C2000. I had an issue with the screen that
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 working but it is slow.
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, the screen is blinking too much
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it
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make
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issue
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 for our eyes. As
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 mentioned it is slow, Whenever we try to use it with our fingers, it
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 too much time to move forward. I expected that
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 it should be faster because it has 4GB RAM.
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 product
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 considered
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 my expectation.
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 ok
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 will see what am going to do.
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, at least show some advanced gadgets for the future.
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22nd
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centurey
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century
 with
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techonlogy
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technology
. Thank you so much

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task achievement
Ensure proper use of formal language throughout the letter, as this is a communication with a company.
coherence and cohesion
Try to structure your letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea. This will improve the overall readability.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter for spelling and grammatical errors, such as ‘i’ instead of ‘I’ and ‘centurey’ instead of ‘century.’
task achievement
You provided a clear explanation of the issue with the product, including specific details about the problems encountered.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter demonstrates an attempt to articulate your expectations clearly.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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