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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical aplliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housheholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical aplliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housheholds in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line chart illustrates the number of houses that have electrical appliances between 1920
to
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and
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 2019. The other one
domentrates
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demonstrates
that
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 changes that these appliances have made
on
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in
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 the time spent doing
a
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housework
at
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 the same period.
Overall
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, over the years, the number of
ouses
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houses
 using washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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icnreased
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increased
 significantly.
As a result
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,
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the
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days
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 spent
in
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cleaning the house decreased. Before 1920, washing
machine
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machines
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 and
refigrator
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refrigerators
introduced
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were introduced
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 to the market and approximately only
around
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30 people used them .
Few
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A few
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 years later, people started
useing vaccum
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using vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 in their houses. The number of individuals adopting the
vaccums
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vacuums
 rose dramatically over the years with over 100% of houses
have
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having
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 it. In 1920, many
days
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spent
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were spent
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to clean
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cleaning
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 the house, but after new technology
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intoduced
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introduced
 to the market. The peak of technology adoption was in 1960, almost 60% have at least one of the household appliances.
Days
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 spent
in
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doing the
home work
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homework
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 decreased sharply after 1960, with
average
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an average
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 of less than 10
days
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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