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Technology has had a large impact on the way people consume news. As a result, newspapers and magazines will disappear in the near future and be completely replaced by online news sources. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The advances in technology have uplifted the modes of media
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. Nowadays, it is evident that
people
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 prefer to consume
news
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 from online platforms, television etcetera rather than reading
newspapers
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.
This
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 essay will discuss
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the drastic change in the
news
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 delivery methods.
To begin
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 with, earlier
people
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 to read
newspapers
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 and magazines for
news
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. But one of the major
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drawback
drawbacks
if
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of
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newspapers
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 was that
it
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 could be read by literate
people
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 only
whereas
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illiterate
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the illiterate
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 were unaware
about
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 the social issues.
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,
news
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 shows on television, radio and other mass media helped these
people
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 to become socially aware.
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, reading a newspaper is very demanding. To exemplify, a person
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 to be seated and completely free to read a newspaper
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whereas
 one can multi-task if he hears
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 on social media
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 as
youtube
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YouTube
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.
Also
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, applications
such
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 as
instagram
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,
facebook
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, telegram and so on provide
latest
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news
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 irrespective of place and time.
To conclude
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,
newspapers
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 have become
old
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 conventional method of delivering
news
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while
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 online
news
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 sources are more convenient and easily available.

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Make sure to clearly outline your argument in the introduction and state your position more explicitly. This will help the reader understand your stance from the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Consider providing a more detailed conclusion that summarizes your main points and reinforces your overall opinion on the topic.
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Try to elaborate on your examples and explain them further to add depth to your points. This will strengthen your arguments and make them more compelling.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to improve the transition between your ideas and paragraphs. This can enhance the overall fluency of the essay.
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You have identified the significant shift in news consumption and provided relevant examples of online platforms that exemplify your points.
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Your points regarding the accessibility of news for both literate and illiterate individuals were insightful and relevant to the discussion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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