IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Pie chart shows the which transports people used. Table shows reasons why they are used transports.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Pie chart shows the which transports people used. Table shows reasons why they are used transports.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The pie chart and table graph illustrate the percentage of utilising the different means of transport and the causes for using the
car
Use synonyms
 in Edmonton.
Overall
Linking Words
, it is evident that the majority of
people
Use synonyms
 are using the
car
Use synonyms
 for commuting to work and business,
while
Linking Words
 the least choose bus and taxi. Whilst, a minor ratio of
people
Use synonyms
 are driving the
car
Use synonyms
 for shopping and recreational activities. By observing the chart, it can be seen that approximately half
proportion
Correct article usage
the proportion
show examples
 of
people
Use synonyms
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
 using a
car
Use synonyms
 for transportation, which is 10% more than using light rail transit accounted 35%. No difference is noticed in the ratio of bus and taxi to travel 10% .
Furthermore
Linking Words
, 55% of individuals are using the
car
Use synonyms
 in the city to go to work. A difference of 5% is recorded in the preferences for business activities and taking children to school noticed 45% and 40% respectively.
However
Linking Words
, 15% of
people
Use synonyms
 are travelling in their own
car
Use synonyms
 for shopping and leisure activities

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words car, people with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: