The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
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The bar chart gives detailed information about
contribution
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the contribution
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of three different sectors–agriculture,industry,and
sevices
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services
to
Indian's
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India's
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GDP over the
period
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of 40 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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contribution
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the contribution
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of
aagriculture
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agriculture
a agriculture
depicted gradually, decline through the given
period
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.
While
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,
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apply
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services
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sector showed
steady
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a steady
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increase.
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proportion
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the proportion
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of
services
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experienced moderate growth
whole
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while
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the
period
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. Looking at
in
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it in
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more
details
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detail
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, agriculture accounted for 60%
in
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of
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Indian's
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India's
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GDP in 1960. After that
period
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agriculture
depicted
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apply
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gradually
decrease
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decreased
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to
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over 50% to nearly 25% by 2000.
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,
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services
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the services
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sector
by
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apply
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which, accounted for less than 20% in 1960, underwent a dramatic expansion reaching nearly 60% by the end of the given
period
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, becoming the largest contributor.
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, the industry sector witnessed a moderate increase, growing
approximately
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from approximately
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15% in 1960 to around 25 percent in 2000.
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its growth was not
a
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as
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dramatic
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such
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apply
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as
services
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, it still played an increasingly important role in
Indian's
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India's
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economy.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, services with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "depicted" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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