The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
There is a
chart
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that illustrates what Anthropology students did after finishing
a
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university.
In addition
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, there is a table which shows the
amount
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of the
salary
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they got in
job
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the job
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after five years.
Overall
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, in the
chart
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, there are 6 different activities that students have done after graduating. It is obvious that he considerable number of them have chosen full-time
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works
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work
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.
Furthermore
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, there are 3 types of employment and
salary
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amounts for these
works
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in the given table.
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with,
the
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Full-time
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works occupy
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almost half past of the
chart
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(52%). Part-time
works
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'
amount
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follows it with 15% and it is bigger than the smallest part of the
chart
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which is the
amount
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of
the
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'full-time work + postgrad study' (5%) 3 times. The count of the 'full-time postgrad study' and 'not known activities' is the same and accounts for 8%.
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,
who
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gains
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$100,000+ in
government
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the government
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sector,
accounts
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account
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for 50%, in private companies, 30%, and
finally
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, as a freelance consultant 40% and
this
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number is the same with the
salary
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$
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75,000-99,999 in the same job. The percentages of $25,000-49,999 and $50,000-74,999 salaries are equal for government jobs and freelance consultants which are 5% and 15% respectively. For private companies workers'
salaries
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salaries,
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these
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are 10% and 35% respectively. At
last
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, the
amount
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of the $75,000-99,999
salary
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is 30% in
government
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sector and 25% in private companies.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, amount, salary, works with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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