Long distance flight consumes the amount of fuel that a car uses for many years and pollutes the air. Some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourists travel, rather than limit the use of cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Long distance
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flights generate more carbon
emission
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compared to other means of transportation
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car
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. Some people encourage to
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unnecessary
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flights to
travel
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and promote
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use
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of other transport. The primary reason to eliminate unwanted travelling through flight is the detrimental effect of
pollution
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in
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the environment.
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, rich people
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prefer
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of using other transportation for more comfort
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status oriented
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more frequently than others. Air
travel
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generates more
pollution
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per passenger than
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of
transportion
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transportation
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car
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,
bus
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or
train
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. Reducing
non essential
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flights,
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tourist related
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travel
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, could significantly lower our carbon footprint and lead to
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sustainable future. Another reason to discourage flying
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is to promote
domestic
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economy
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as local
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and
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positively to
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the current
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environmental crisis.
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, virtual tourism is not only
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but
also
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helpful to protect our planet. Air
pollution
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has not only affected our health but
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the flora and fauna at a global level, which is concerning and we must address it through
resposible
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responsible
measures as global citizens. We must try to
use
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more eco-friendly means to
travel
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and enjoy the resources for longer
period
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on
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time.
To conclude
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of saving
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the planet from air
pollution
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that is
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caused by
long distance
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aircrafts
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aircraft
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and limit
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use
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the use
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of non-required
travel
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. It
our
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duty to contribute positively towards a sustainable future and
use
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local transport. It not only saves fuel but
also
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reduce
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pollution
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the use of linking words and phrases to enhance flow between ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your points, especially in relation to the economy and environmental benefits of reduced flying.
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Consider refining your thesis statement to clearly state your position on the issue discussed.
task achievement
The essay addresses an important global issue and presents relevant arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reinforces the call to action.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • air pollution
  • sustainable future
  • carbon footprint
  • regulating
  • passenger transportation
  • virtual tourism
  • domestic economies
  • equitable climate policies
  • non-essential flights
  • tourism-related travel
  • environmental crisis
  • long-distance travel
  • pollution levels
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