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In the future, nobody will buy printed books or newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying? To what extent, do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is a view that says there will be no need for printed
books
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 in the future, because of developing free online reading materials.
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 with that opinion. Even in today's
wolrd
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world
, there are a lot of
e-bookbooks
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e-book books
 platforms which allow us to read about everything without paying.
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, these types of
books
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 don't occupy as much place as traditional ones and it gives them more flexibility
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 with, thanks to
Internet
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the Internet
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 reading
books
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 become more comfortable than ever. Via the Internet, everybody can search on browsers and find the book that they want to get in only
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 seconds.
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, In Azerbaijan, someone who wants to read about the Karabakh War Story, can visit the website of the Azerbaijan National Library named after M.F. Akhundov, and download
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PDF
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 format
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books
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 related to the topic without leaving home. So, they don't waste their time in traffic.
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, e-
books
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 make carrying the
books
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 easier. With only one device
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a smartphone
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, notebook and tablet it is possible to take them everywhere. It benefits especially younger-aged pupils who experience difficulties when carrying heavy
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full of
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books
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 to school. It can hurt their backs and there are some solutions for it.
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, in order to save children's health, some governments like Canada and
USA
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the USA
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 give electron units which can be used only for studying
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 don't harm
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the eyes
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to
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the schoolchilds. In conclusion, electron reading has many advantages for people
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 all ages. It prevents time loss and
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 some medical problems. In the future, use of these technologies will increase and replace printed
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task achievement
Your introduction is clear, but it could be improved by providing a more nuanced discussion of both sides of the argument. Mentioning potential benefits of printed books could strengthen your position.
coherence
Make sure to consistently use correct terminology and expressions. For example, instead of 'e-bookbooks,' just use 'e-books.'
coherence
When giving examples, it's essential to ensure clarity. Instead of 'download pdf format of books,' consider phrasing it as 'download books in PDF format.' This will improve clarity and fluency.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples that relate well to your argument, particularly your reference to the Azerbaijan National Library.
coherence
Your concluding statement effectively summarizes your main points and reinforces your argument about the future of reading.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • printed books
  • newspapers
  • online reading
  • digital content
  • paywall
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • environmental impact
  • traditional reading experience
  • ownership
  • personal connection
  • reliability
  • credibility
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
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