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You are being sent on a one-month work assignment in San Francisco, California. You need a place to stay while you are there. Write a letter to the Maury Samson Real Estate Agency. In your letter: explain the situation describe the kind of accommodation you would like and provide the dates you will need it. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Samson,

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Dear Mr Samson I'm writing to you
so that
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apply
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to rent an
apartment
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 in San Francisco, California. I urgently need a house . I
go
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am going
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 to San Francisco
by
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for
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 two days . I don't have any relatives or friends there so I can't find
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apartment
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an apartment
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today
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Today
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 I am looking
for
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to
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 rent
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apartment
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an apartment
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 I saw your
advertising
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advertisement
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in
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on
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 television and show
different
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a different
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type
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types
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 of
house
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houses
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. So that if it is possible to give me
comfortable
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a comfortable
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apartment
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 for a month I will be happy. I hope you reply to my letter.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 sincerely Zarifova Mohidil

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Task Achievement
Include specific details about the kind of accommodation you are looking for, such as the number of bedrooms, amenities, and budget.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your ideas more clearly into distinct paragraphs, each with a focused topic. For example, one paragraph could explain your situation, and another could describe your accommodation needs.
Task Achievement
Use more formal language and correct grammar for a more professional tone. For example, instead of 'I'm writing to you so that to rent an apartment,' you could say 'I am writing to inquire about renting an apartment.'
Task Achievement
The letter clearly states your need for accommodation and the urgency of your situation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The closing of the letter is polite and courteous, which is important in professional correspondence.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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