Some people think that city planner should consider creating more green spaces and planting trees, while others argue that they should focus on building new homes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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the map below illustrates three planned areas for a new shop.
however
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, the three locations
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different regions within the city of Ellington.
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it is clear that
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the B position is
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far
from the middle of the country compared with others.
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, the south land is close to the
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airport
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. the A site
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between many facilities.
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with, the B site has a stable location for those people who live in the countryside. but, it is located in an outlying area.
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, the A land is in the most stable position for many reasons
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as it is near to the Traffic-free zone and the park in the centre of the map.
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, it is situated within the Residential.
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, the C district
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between the industrial and Residential zone. along the Motorway.

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task achievement
Improve the introduction by clearly stating what the map illustrates and the significance of the locations being discussed. A brief overview can help set the context better.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the descriptions of locations are clear and well-supported with logical reasons for their advantages or disadvantages. For example, elaborating on how the A site is advantageous due to its proximity to amenities would enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures and vocabulary to express ideas. For example, instead of 'stable location', you could say 'well-situated location'. This variety can enhance the overall quality of the writing.
coherence and cohesion
Review the grammatical accuracy, particularly article use and prepositions. For instance, instead of 'near to the Traffic-free zone', it would be more appropriate to say 'near the traffic-free zone'.
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You presented a good comparison of the locations, which shows an understanding of their differences.
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The essay contains relevant information about each site, showcasing some strengths and weaknesses.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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