Some people think that newspapers are the best way to learn news. However, others believe that they can learn news better through other medias. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays many
people
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read
news
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and
books
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online for free. Printed
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and
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important in daily life.
However
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newspapers
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and
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expensive but they are reliable. I will write about the benefits of online
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. Some
people
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still like printed
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and
newspapers
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. Reading on
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is better for
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the eyes
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and does not need the internet 
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battery. Many
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enjoy collecting
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and go to
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and buy
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. Reading on
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comfortable
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for
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eyes. Reading
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and
newspapers
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increases a person's worldview. Future need
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and
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for
people
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because it's useful.
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going to the library to buy a book takes a lot of time. Many
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prefer reading online because it is easy and free. They can read
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and
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phone anytime. Online reading
also
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saves money because there is no need
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printed
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and
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.
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is environmentally friendly
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and less
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paper
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waste .You can find
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,
news
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  and articles from
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the world Online
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update instantly
while
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printed  can become outdated. You can follow breaking
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it
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as it
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happens. No need  to carry heavy
books
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newspapers
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or newspapers
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. Instant translation tools help understand foreign
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. Reduce
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use and help save trees . No printing,
transportation
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or transportation
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waste disposal
needed
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is needed
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. In conclusion, online reading becoming more popular but printed
books
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and
newspapers
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will not disappear completely. Some
people
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will always prefer real
books
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but I will prefer online reading because online reading
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and free. One can get a lot of information through online reading. Online reading
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comfortable. Muzaffarov Sarvar.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction would benefit from clearly presenting both sides of the argument, as well as your own opinion. Consider rephrasing your thesis statement to make it clearer.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence, make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas within paragraphs flow logically from one to the next. Using transition words could help.
Task Achievement
You provided a good range of ideas about the benefits of both printed and online media. Your essay addresses the topic well and includes relevant points.
Task Achievement
The examples you used for online reading, such as convenience and environmental benefits, were relevant and helped to support your argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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