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You are in a hospital with a broken leg. Your colleagues have sent you get well soon greeting cards and gifts. Write a letter to them and include: Thank them for everything Explain how you spend time in the hospital Inform them about your recovery process

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Dear Team I got your letter and I am very happy to know that you are doing great at work and using your spare time to learn French, But for now, you already know my situation. I am very grateful to have colleagues like you because it will be so difficult for me to catch up with the office work and you know the hospital food is too simple. But thanks to you, I can eat now healthy and fresh food, because you sent me homemade food. You remember once I told you when I will get free time. I will start reading novels. Other than sleeping and using the phone I started reading
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 and the author is Collen Hower. I kind of like her novel. Well, Doctor told me that I can be discharged in the upcoming week. But he strictly told me to do some leg exercises so that it wouldn't be that difficult later on. I am willing to see you and again enjoy a cup of tea in our cafe. Yours faithfully Kirti

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coherence and cohesion
While you provided a good overall response, consider ensuring that each paragraph's main idea is clearly stated, leading to a stronger logical structure.
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Try to maintain a more formal tone throughout the letter, as it is a professional communication to your colleagues.
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You did a great job expressing gratitude towards your colleagues and sharing personal experiences during your hospital stay, which adds warmth to the letter.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear structure, with a greeting, body, and closing, which provides a helpful organization for the reader.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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