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This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.

This graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the percentage of
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recycling materials like paper and cupboards,glass containers, aluminium cans, and plastics between 1982 and 2010 in a specific region.
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, all four substances recorded a significant increase by the end of the period, notably, the paper& cupboard kept its rank as the first throughout the years. Though
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 the aluminium cans recycling started late by the second era , its
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 had the greatest growth among other materials as it doubled five times from its first
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. As the data clearly indicates,the paper and cupboard category started with the highest
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 among all the materials at almost 65 in 1982.The given material hit 80 % in 1924,but after that, it decreased to 70 % in 2010.
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,the aluminium can that appeared in the graph in 1986 with the lowest
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 at almost 5 %. Interestingly, it showed a stable increase throughout the years as it reached just above 40 %,
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 itself with the most notable growth with approximately 35 % rise. Moving to the second recycling material, which is glass containers,
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started at 50 % in 1982. Though
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it declined by the second period to 40 %, its
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 rose gradually throughout the twenty-year as it reached 60 %. The plastic substance began later in the middle of 1990, had the less significant change with
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 3% increase from more than 1 % to below 5 %.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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