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Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools, especially at the preschool level. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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music
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spelling
Make sure to proofread your work for spelling and grammatical errors. For example, 'nusseccry' should be 'necessary' and 'lahend' should be 'legend'.
cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly. Use clear topic sentences and transitions to help the reader follow your argument.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention how music can impact emotional development or enhance social skills at the preschool level.
content
You shared a personal opinion on the importance of music, which is a good way to engage the reader.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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