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The numbers of children that read books for fun has dropped dramatically in recent years. What are the reasons for this? How can we encourage children to read more?

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Reading books has always been a source of knowledge.
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, studies show that fewer people, especially children, are reading books recently. Motivating the next generation to read is critical as they are the future of humanity. In
this
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 essay, I will explain the means by which
parents
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 and institutions can motivate young learners to read.
Parents
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 play a significant role in involving their kids in reading. Simple daily habits could influence the vision of their offspring.
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, enjoying narrating a bedtime story helps the kid not only to be more excited every day for a new story
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 but
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 stretch their minds to visualize the events, which
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 reading a new
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interesting
 journey for them.
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, Institutions like Schools, Community
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, and public libraries may promote reading through different mediums.
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 as social activities, book fairs, reading competitions, and social media.
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, a public library may encourage
parents
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 their kids to participate in an open reading fun day, where families can read and share knowledge.
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, they can
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build
 a reading community and organize more activities. In conclusion, reading is a
fundemental
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fundamental
 skill to build a mature generation.
Parents
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 and institutions can strongly support
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 skill and increase the
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number
 of kids interested in reading.

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Task Achievement
Expand your introduction by including specific reasons why reading is important and a brief overview of the points you will discuss. This will make your essay more comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that supporting details clearly relate back to that idea. This will improve your overall clarity and coherence.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for minor spelling errors (e.g., 'interisting' should be 'interesting', 'buid' should be 'build', 'fundemental' should be 'fundamental', 'nubmer' should be 'number'). Proofreading your work will help eliminate these mistakes and enhance your writing's professionalism.
Content
The essay effectively highlights the roles of both parents and institutions in encouraging reading, providing a balanced perspective.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your conclusion succinctly reiterates the importance of reading and the collaborative role of parents and institutions, which is well articulated.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dropped dramatically
  • screen time
  • alternative entertainment
  • academic workloads
  • role models
  • low-income areas
  • reading-friendly environment
  • positive reading behavior
  • book clubs
  • interactive reading apps
  • diverse book choices
  • reward-based incentives
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