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Some people think that robots are important for human`s future development. Other think that robots have negative impacts on society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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belived
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believed
 by some people that automation would be helpful to humans in their upcoming growth
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other
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 counter that it gives negative results to the nation. In upcoming
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i
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 will discuss both pros and cons of the same. On the one hand, why
people
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 support the idea that robots will improve the lifestyle of
human
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the
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dangerous tasks, economic growth and innovation. Now days labor faces many
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risk
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 in mines,
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 tall buildings these jobs include health
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 in future if
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 jobs perform by robots. People can feel secure and safe

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language
Make sure to check for spelling and grammatical errors, as these can detract from the clarity of your ideas. For example, 'belived' should be 'believed'.
structure
Enhance the introduction and conclusion to clearly outline your stance and recapitulate your main arguments. A strong opinion statement can help connect your ideas effectively.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that your ideas flow logically from one to another. Connecting phrases can enhance cohesion.
content
You have successfully identified both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of discussion essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Innovation
  • Labor-saving devices
  • Precision engineering
  • Economic efficiency
  • Disruption
  • Workforce displacement
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Regulation
  • Digital divide
  • Skill obsolescence
  • Social interaction
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