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The aim of this report is to analyze the presented graph and compare the given information about the average number of UK commuters traveling each day by car, bus or train.

The aim of this report is to analyze the presented graph and compare the given information about the average number of UK commuters traveling each day by car, bus or train.
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The aim of
this
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 report is to analyze the presented graph and compare the given information about the average number of UK
commuters
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traveling
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travelling
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 each
day
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 by
car
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, bus or train.
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 it can be seen that
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most
commuters
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 since 1970
travel
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 every
day
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 by
car
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 and it is assumed that in 2030 even more
people
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 will
travel
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 each
day
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 by
car
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. The popularity between
buses
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 and trains
varies
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varied
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 over the
years
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: in 1970 around 4
million
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commuters
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 showed their interest in
traveling
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travelling
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 by bus, at that same time more than 2
million
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people
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 chose trains over
buses
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 and
cars
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. The statistics
shows
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show
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 that
popularity
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the popularity
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among
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of
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buses
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 has little by little decreased, over 55
years
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, and it will decrease even more
until
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by
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 2030 (around 1
million
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less
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fewer
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people
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 are choosing
buses
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 as their daily transportation).
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, the train's admiration increased
over
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by over
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 2
million
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, since 1970 and it is considered for
even
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an even
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 bigger success in the future. Even though the trains are more and more popular every decade it is not even close to the
numbers
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number
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 of
commuters
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 who
chose
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choose
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 to
travel
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 by
car
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. In 1970 around 5
million
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people
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 chose
cars
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 for their daily journeys. These numbers have significantly increased over the
years
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. Nowadays 8.5
million
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people
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 choose
cars
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 and it is thought that by the year
of
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apply
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2030 around 9
million
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people
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 will
travel
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 by
car
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 every
day
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. Generally, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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UK
commuters
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 choose
cars
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 as their vehicle, but the train popularity has
also
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 increased a lot over the
years
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,
while
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buses
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 are less and less selected amongst UK
commuters
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words commuters, day, car, travel, people, buses, years, million, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presented" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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