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Some people say that it is acceptable to test medicine intended for people on animals. Others, however, believe that it is not right to use animals in this research. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Certain
indiviuals
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individuals
 are
agrue
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agree
argue
agreed
 that it is good to do
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an experiment
the experiment
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experiment
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experiments
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of
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on
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medicine
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 on
animals
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 before human use
while
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 others believe that
this
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 is not a correct approach.
Although
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this
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 is
a
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the
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 cheapest method to check
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the
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effects of drugs, I believe that
animals
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also
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 have life and
they
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apply
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should not be killed.
Body paragraph 1
On one hand, it is one of the simplest and
time saving
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technique
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techniques
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 to check
weather
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whether
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medicine
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 will
safe
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be safe
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 for
human's
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human
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 use. Most
of
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apply
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animals
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'
body work
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bodywork
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as
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is
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same
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the same
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 as human body work,
such
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 as
mosuse
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mouse
mousse
misuse
.
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,
scientist
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scientists
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 can examine the changes
on
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in
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 living
organism
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organisms
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 because of
medicine
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 before implementing it
on
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in
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 public.
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, Oxford
labortery
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laboratory
at
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in
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 London
sucessfullly
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successfully
 develop
medicine
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 for cancer treatment by doing testing on
animals
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, saving lots of lives.
Body paragraph 2
On
other
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the other
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 hand,
animals
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also
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 take breath means they are
a
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apply
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living things and
making
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putting
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 their life
on
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at
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 risk is not right.
Significant
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A significant
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 number of
animals
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killed
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are killed
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 every year
while
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 performing
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the experiment
an experiment
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experiment
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experiments
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, leading to
elimination
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the elimination
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 of various
animal's
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animal
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 species.
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,
natural
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the natural
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 food chain is in danger because of
distinction
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the distinction
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 of some
animals
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'
family
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families
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.
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, a study done by
American
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an American
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 University found that
in
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apply
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every
calender
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calendar
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 year, nearly one million
animals
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 are killed because of
medicine
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 testing, causing
decline
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a decline
the decline
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 in
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the animal's
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animal's
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animal
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popullation
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population
.
Conclusion
To conclude
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, testing of drugs
are
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is
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 important to check its negative effects but it should not be done on
animals
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. Other methods should
be find
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be found
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 to save living organism's life.

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language
Ensure proper spelling to enhance clarity and professionalism; for instance, 'indiviuals' should be 'individuals' and 'agrue' should be 'argue'.
task response
Provide a more clearly defined opinion on the issue in your introduction to set the tone for the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Strengthen your conclusion by not only summarizing but also stating how your views can contribute to the ongoing debate regarding medicinal testing.
task achievement
The use of specific examples, such as the Oxford laboratory's cancer treatment, shows a good understanding of the topic.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal testing
  • medical research
  • treatment
  • human diseases
  • safety
  • efficacy
  • ethical guidelines
  • regulations
  • minimize suffering
  • humane treatment
  • sentient beings
  • rights
  • alternative methods
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • reliable
  • biological differences
  • ineffective
  • harmful treatments
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