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Band 2.5

It is important for everyone including young people to save money for their future To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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It is considered essential for every individual including the young ones to spare some
money
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future
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this
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 statement because
not only be spared
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apply
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money
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 will be used in the
future
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 but
also
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 in emergencies. Saving
money
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 is one of the key concepts in life as we all don't know what could happen. As everyone ever
save
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money
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 for themselves, it is
also
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 important for parents to
instill
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 the same
behavior
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to
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in
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 kids, which
does
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not only teach them how to save
money
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 but to use it carefully and to be responsible and not
spoiling
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 it on unnecessary things.
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, in
life
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 there are
unforseen
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unforeseen
 problems that occur and that would require an individual to spend sums of
money
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 unexpectedly.
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, funerals,
hospital
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and hospital
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 bills. So it would be much better to go through all
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while
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 having savings and there will be reduced stress levels and burdens In conclusion, it is vital to save up
money
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 for
future
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saving
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money
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 to be taught to young kids
kids
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as it wouldn't be used only in the
future
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 but during
unforseen
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unforeseen
 occurrences.

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language
Work on varying your vocabulary to avoid repetition and improve clarity. For instance, instead of saying 'spare some money,' you could say 'set aside money.'
content
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea, and provide more examples to support your points. This will strengthen your arguments and make your essay more persuasive.
structure
Consider expanding your conclusion slightly to summarize your main points more explicitly. This helps reinforce your position and provides a more cohesive ending.
content
Your introduction clearly states your agreement with the prompt, which sets a clear direction for your essay.
content
You’ve made a relevant point about the importance of savings for unexpected events, which adds depth to your argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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