1.⁠ ⁠Long distance flight consumes the amount of fuel that a car uses for many years and pollutes the air. Some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourists travel, rather than limit the use of cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays many people think that
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long-haul trip
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airways often utilizes large
quantity
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of gas,
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, utilizing
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an automobile
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is a better option
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travel
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due to
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less consumption of fuel. I strongly disagree with the thought of opting automobile for short trips or exploring local tourist spots. In
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essay, I will be discussing
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more in detail
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the usage of
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airways
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for travelling.
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, I would like to highlight the advantages of travelling
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Aero plane
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Aeroplane
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for exploring
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to explore
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new places, which are,
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, it saves a lot of time and energy, it gives
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comfort to the passenger, safety aspect
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travelling and decent discount offers
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if planned well ahead.
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, a recent study from
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the US
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, reveals that 90% of
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people enjoyed their
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journey
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flights
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flight
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instead
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road
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trips
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less
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being less
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prone to car
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, I believe, travellers enjoy the most when their
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experiences are comforting and relaxing irrespective of their duration. Majority of the people
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to enjoy their vacation in a luxurious manner, which is only possible when
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traveling
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is quick and
hassle free
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.
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, traveling via roadways
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always prone to
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and bumpy
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journeys, there are times when commuting
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car is not a safe option
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aware
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the remote locations, language barrier and
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rage. Recently, A study from India, revealed that 85% of
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road
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accidents
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are caused
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road
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rage and no proper infrastructure for
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journeys,
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lack of infrastructure often leads to
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accidents
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and compromises the safety of
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travelers
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travellers
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and their families in many ways.
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, I strongly believe,
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airways
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for airways
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for
best
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the best
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travel
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experiences
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experience
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is indeed a great choice, which can offer us
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comfort, relaxation and safety features in all possible manner.
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,
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economical as compared to
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another mode
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of transport.

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Task Achievement
The introduction could provide a clearer statement of your position. Make sure to explicitly state whether you agree or disagree with the prompt and give a brief overview of your main points.
Coherence and Cohesion
In your body paragraphs, ensure that each paragraph not only presents an idea but also clearly links it back to the main argument of the essay regarding long-distance flights versus cars. Use transition phrases for better flow.
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While you provided examples, integrating them more seamlessly into your arguments would increase their effectiveness. For instance, you could explain how the studies you referenced support your claims about safety and efficiency in air travel.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear stance against the suggestion to favor cars over flights, which shows a strong personal opinion.
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There are some well-explained advantages of flying, highlighting safety and comfort, which adds depth to your argument.
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You demonstrate an understanding of potential road safety issues, which adds complexity to your argument in favor of air travel.
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