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Band 6

Some people think that companies and supermarkets should use less packaging for their products. Others say that customers themselves should avoid buying products with too much packaging.Consider both arguments and present your viewpoint.

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There is a debatable issue about packaging
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, whether supermarkets should reduce packaging or consumers should buy products that are less packaged goods. In
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 essay, I will explain both opinions and my views. On the one hand, the packaging is the supermarket's responsibility. Sometimes, many packages cause extra trash resulted and endanger the environment. Many events happen
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 people's tendency to put rubbish everywhere. The supermarkets should reduce
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 to decrease the negative impact. Selling paper
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 and foldable to carry will help the government to solve the
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 of the environment. The solution can increase the views of the company because they are concerned about
plastic
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 bag
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.
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,
customers
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 play a crucial role in shaping market trends. Because of sensitive jobs,
customers
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 should be active, too. They are the main financial resources for the company and ensure the environment. It can be helped by government rules, where they can release it as long as it suits people's needs. The rules can bring their paper
bags
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 when to buy some food. It has a big impact on sustainability. People shouldn't shopping with
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bags
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. In conclusion, companies should take priority to support
plastic
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bags
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, and
customers
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 should bring their
plastic
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bags
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 that can be used again for the project. In my view, both of them play an important
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 in solving the environmental problem. The companies can inform the workers to work effectively without negative
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 and the
customers
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 can use their paper
bags
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 that
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Clarify your main ideas in each paragraph. Ensure each point directly supports your argument and is well-explained.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures to improve the flow of your essay. This can enhance coherence.
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Make sure to provide specific examples or data to support your points, which can strengthen your argument and improve task response.
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Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, which is essential for a well-rounded discussion.
coherence and cohesion
You included a clear introduction and conclusion, helping to frame your essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive packaging
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • landfills
  • pollution
  • eco-friendly
  • consumer behavior
  • responsibility
  • purchasing decisions
  • recyclable packaging
  • collaborative effort
  • marketing strategies
  • brand image
  • corporate social responsibility
  • waste reduction
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