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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The chart illustrates the destination of
graduates
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 who finished
Anthropology
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the Anthropology
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 program
in
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at
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 one particular university. Meanwhile, the table gives information about their income after 5 years of
work
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. Units are measured in percentages and dollars.
Overall
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, it can be seen that more than
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half of
graduates
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 devoted themself just to
work
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,
while
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 others tried to combine full-time and part-time
work
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 with postgrad study.
According to
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 the table,
graduates
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 who worked in
government
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the government
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 sector received higher earnings than people who provided freelance consultations and worked in private companies.
To begin
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 with, the proportion of
graduates
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 who had just full-time
work
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 accounted for 52%,
whereas
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 people who combined
this
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 employment type and postgrad study was 8%. Concerning individuals with a part-time job 15 % of them just worked, meanwhile 5 % worked and studied at the same time. Taking into consideration information from the table, it can be observed that in
government
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the government
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 sector
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half of anthropologists received salaries of more than 100,000 dollars. In the meantime, 40% and 30% of
graduates
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 who worked for freelance consultants and private companies earned the same payments, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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