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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

E-mail has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but this impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the disadvantages of using e-mail outweigh the advantages?

In the prevailing era,
e-mail
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 has become a prominent means of communication around the world. It has been used to communicate on a professional and social level. I believe that
this
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 trend has more pros
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then
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 cons. To
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 with the most salient
benefits
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how
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e-mail
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 impacts
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people
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 lives is that it is the fastest mode of communication. An
e-email
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 takes less than one
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minute
minutes
 to reach
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its destination without any obstacles.
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, companies can make deals with their dealers and customers which may help to foster their productivity.
People
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 can talk to their loved ones within
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 time which helps them to maintain
relationship
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relationships
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.
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, email is a
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 method.
People
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need
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 not to take
membership
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a membership
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 to join the email. Everyone can use it with the help of reliable internet. Despite its
given
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advantages, drawbacks can not be overlooked because
e-mail
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 can be used to spread
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malware and
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 scams that can pose a significant risk to
organization
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 and mankind. Some Information is quite sensitive and crucial for most
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the
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industries and
prople
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people
.
Due to
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 scams,
people
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 can lose their data.
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e-mail
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 has some downsides.
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,
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 using
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 is vulnerable for
organization
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organizations
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 and
people
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due to
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the
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security reasons, I
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e-mail
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 brings tremendous benefits to both
human
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humans
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 and firms because of its
fastest
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fast
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 speed
coupled with
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it
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helps
people
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 to
communicae
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communicate
 with each other.

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Your introduction clearly outlines your stance on the topic, which is great. However, consider briefly summarizing the main points you will discuss in your body paragraphs to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Your body paragraphs present some interesting ideas but could benefit from a more logical flow. Ensure that each point builds on the previous one to strengthen overall coherence.
task achievement
In your conclusion, you summarized your view, but including a more definitive statement about whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages could enhance your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with minor spelling and grammatical errors. For instance, 'e-email' should be 'email' and 'prople' should be 'people'. Typos can detract from the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You effectively highlighted the speed and cost-effectiveness of email communication, which are strong advantages in your argument.
task achievement
Your awareness of the dangers of email, such as scams and malware, adds depth to your essay making it more balanced.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • professional
  • social interaction
  • efficiency
  • long-distance
  • information exchange
  • organization
  • distraction
  • miscommunication
  • non-verbal cues
  • escalation
  • interpersonal skills
  • reliance
  • personal relationships
  • digital landscape
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