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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ' jncome in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ' jncome in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
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apply
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bar graph presents statistics about the annual salary of US households. For the purpose of
this
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 data set, 3 years have been taken
to
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into
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 account, including 2007, 2011, and 2015. Units are measured in millions. From an
overall
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 perspective, what stands out is that the range of above $ 100.00 accounts for the highest
number
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 of US households in all three years.
However
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, the income
ranges
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range
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 of 75.000 to 100.00 remain almost constant in 3 years at approximately 15
million
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 population and
account
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accounting
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 for the lowest household population. Turning next to the
number
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 of US households, witness a slight increase in the
number
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 of families having above $ 100,000 salaries from approximately 30 to 33
million
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 from 2207 to 2011. The
number
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of familis
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familis
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families
family
familiar
 with
the
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an
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 income of $25.000 and below, there is a sharp
rose
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rise
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 from 2007 to 2011 observed for the $25.000 to $50.000 salary range from roughly 27 to 30
million
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household
Change to a plural noun
households
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.
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, it
followed
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was followed
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 by a slight decrease to approximately 28
million
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. The annual salary range
$
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of $
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50.000 to $75.000
is
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accounts for
the
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approximately 20
million
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household
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households
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 and it
remain
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remains
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 constant over
this
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 period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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