Governments should s;pend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Authorities should invest money
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railroads rather than building roads. I personally agree with
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statement because it is
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an effecient
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effecient
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efficient
way
for
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transportation
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for goods and
people
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, it will save
the
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time
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and sustain the environment.
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with, it has been known for decades the efficiency of
travilling
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travelling
inside the country from one place to another and to other countries
with
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trains
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because it is
significantlly
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significantly
more productive, not only for the passengers
,
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but
also
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for goods and conducting
further
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businseese
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businesses
business
to transfer
heavey
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heavy
and
great
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a great
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amount of products.
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, in India, the majority of
people
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use the rail on
daily
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a daily
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basis, for work, study and other purposes.
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, they will avoid the
tremendouse
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tremendous
amount of car prices and gaz\petrol functuation
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bad economic.
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, it is more
convenience
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to
getting
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to any
distination
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destination
using the rails, which will save
time
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, where it has become the sufficient way to travel, that will allow
individual
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an individual
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to have quality
time
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with their families,
colleauges
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colleagues
, and
practicing
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hobbies. In Japan
people
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and even tourists
will
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prefere
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prefer
to use the railway for daily movement
insted
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instead
of
stucking
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in congestion for an hour or more,
comparing
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compared
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to a couple of minutes transporting by train
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.
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, considering the railways as the best way to save passengers their
time
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and lower rate for the tickets, it is
significantlly
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significantly
significant
,
efficientlly
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efficiently
and environmentally emitting the greenhouse
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gasses
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in the ozone layer.
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, in
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the
railroadsare
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railroads are
railroads
are operating with electricity to reduce the carbon
dioxcide
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dioxide
level, and the metro has been the only transportation for
people
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during the Qatar World Cup 2022.
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, I think that local
authority
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authorities
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should consider investing in constructing
railroad
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a railroad
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for the
benefits
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benefit
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of their
people
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and sustaining the environment.

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