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The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided maps illustrate the main differences between Lynwich
College
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 in 2006 and nowadays. There were two
college
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 buildings, one parking lot, a library, and one big sports field. Since
then
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, the territory of Lynwich
College
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 has changed significantly. First of all, some trees near the second
college
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 building were cut down, and the library moved to
this
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 location.
Moreover
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, a big cafeteria appeared in the
center
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centre
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 of the map, and the pathways were expanded.
Although
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 the territory of the sports field has been reduced, a new sports
center
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centre
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 was built
right
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 nearby. One more change is that the parking lot was divided into two parts, and the
right
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 part became bike storage.
Finally
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, the bus stop appeared near the
right
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 side of the parking lot
right
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 beneath the road. Despite the fact that
college
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 infrastructure has increased, the garden that was located under the road in 2006 has been partially preserved until now.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words college, right with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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