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The diagram below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparison where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of transport means and
car
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 use in Edmonton,
while
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 the table shows the reasons for using the
car
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 in
this
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 place.
It is clear that
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 the most popular types of transport utilised by the population in Edmonton are cars and LRT,
whereas
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 buses and taxis are not so frequently used. Notably, the main reasons for
car
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 exploitation are commuting, business, and taking children to school. Focusing first on the principal transport means, 45% and 35% of the total percentage of vehicles accouns for cars and LRT (light rail transit), as opposed to 10% for each bus and taxi. As for the factors leading people to use the
car
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 in the city, 55%, 45%, and 40% of them prefer it because it is more convenient to commute, to run their business, and to take children to school. Another 15% of residents choose the
car
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 to do shopping or for their leisure activities.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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