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some people think that cars should be banned for reducing pollution to what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals are of the opinion that
cars
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 should be banned in
order
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 to minimize
pollution
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. I do not agree with
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 supported perspective for some grounds and I will explain them in the forthcoming paragraphs in detail by stating my own position in the second body paragraph. Admittedly, those who support the idea
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that
cars
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 should be banned in
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 to minimize
pollution
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 can be rational
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 some regards. The first and
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foremost reason behind
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 is that
cars
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 release bad
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 into the air.
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, it is not so difficult to notice why the people who advocate the opinion
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that transport should be banned in
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 to minimize
pollution
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 true in
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 respect. Despite these notions mentioned above, I am inclined to say that other perspectives should be taken into account as well. There are a number of reasons
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why I think so. One obvious example in
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 regard is that companies
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 pollute
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nature. Another reason to advocate my opinion could be that people cut down many trees. Not surprisingly, it would be a shallow idea to approach
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 from only one angle
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 there are other ways to be taken into consideration. In conclusion,
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 it is a common belief that
cars
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pollution
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, I believe that companies
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nature by cutting trees.

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task achievement
Clarify your stance in the introduction more explicitly to strengthen your position.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of ideas.
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Provide more specific examples and explanations to support your points in the body paragraphs.
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Your essay covers the topic and addresses both perspectives, which is a good approach.
coherence and cohesion
The organization of your essay is clear, with distinct paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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