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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Government
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 has to provide free
healthcare
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 and
education
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 for the citizens.I
completly
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completely
 agree, because
its
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it's
it is
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cinsidered
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considered
 as an investment when it comes to free
education
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.
this
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 will help decrease poverty, so it will have a huge impact on the country's development
while
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unpaied
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unpaid
unpaired
healthcare
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 will encourage
people
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 to not neglect their
health
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 which will limit their
health
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problem
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problems
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 from becoming worse, and
this
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 will protect
people
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's lives. It is essential to make
education
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avalible
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available
 for everyone because that means they will gain knowledge, so it will
helpe
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help
 them to be qualified to have a job, and
easier
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it easier
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 to find
it
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one
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,
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apply
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 or to invent
an
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apply
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increadible
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incredible
incredibly
 valuable things that will attract other
countrys
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countrys'
country's
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 attention, and they will pay money to obtain these inventions.
therefore
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 the country's economy will improve.
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, in Saudi Arabia
education
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 is
accesable
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accessible
 for everyone, and the percentage of poor
people
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 is very low.
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, their economy is decent. The majority of
people
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 tend to delay going to check their
health
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 issues. because
,
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apply
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 the
symptemps
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symptoms
 are still minor, so they would rather
to
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keep their money for something much more important. But
this
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 can be changed if they
knew
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know
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 that they can have
healthcare
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 for free, as it
is
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apply
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will push them to pay
a
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apply
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close attention to their
well being
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well-being
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,
so
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apply
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as a
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result
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result,
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this
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 will prevent the
symptemps
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symptoms
 from developing
to
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into
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 a serious problem.
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, cancer can be cured easily if they discover it in an early stage, but most
people
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unfortunatly
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unfortunately
 neglect themselves due
their
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to their
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 financial circumstances until it becomes serious. in
this
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case
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case,
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this
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 will be much difficult to deal with.
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, a lot of
people
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 will
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lose
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loose
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lose
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 their lives In conclusion, I agree that
government
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the government
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 must take care of these two
servises
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services
 for free. because for
education
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this
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 will be
cosidered
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considered
 as a mutual benefit, and for
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healthcare
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healthcare,
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 it will empower
people
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 to take a regular
health
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 checkup,
and
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apply
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preventing the case from becoming serious.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider improving the clarity and fluency of your sentences. Some sentences are quite long and complex, which may lead to confusion. Try to simplify your ideas and break them down into shorter sentences when appropriate.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical issues to enhance the professionalism of your essay. For example, 'completly' should be 'completely', and 'unpaied' should be 'unpaid'.
task achievement
Expand on your examples and explanations. While you provided some examples, adding more detail or a variety of examples could strengthen your argument and provide clearer support for your points.
coherence and cohesion
You have structured your essay into paragraphs with clear main ideas, which is a strong foundation for coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Your arguments for both education and healthcare are relevant and demonstrate a good understanding of the topic.
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