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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building the live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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Populations in countries around the world have begun wondering about the history of their hometowns. The main reasons behind
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 may include curiosity and pride. People may find resources about their origins through books and
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 with elder habitants.
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 curiosity to reflect back on their past and how
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they manage to do it. Being proud of the ancient roots of your house is one of the main reasons to search for it in the first place. The nature of all human beings
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 them to be loyal and to find their tribe or community. To add on, finding a society with a strong background may encourage a lot of individuals and
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 the drive that fuels their curiosity to look deep into their past.
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research on how the buildings of my city were a century ago to satisfy my desire to look for pride. Articles in books or newspapers may be the
appropiate
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appropriate
 source to display the events that have
occured
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occurred
 in the past decades. A resource
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 as a paper would be a good candidate as it is validated before publishing.
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, digging into deep old local articles may include the materials you would look for. In conclusion, Human's motive behind looking back into their old lives stems from their interest in their pride. They can achieve
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 by searching through reliable logs.

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The essay presents some clear reasons for why people are interested in the history of their homes.
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You have a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is a good foundation for your essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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