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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for future years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays the migration of
people
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 from the countryside to the city, in three different nations and the expectation
to
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 the next years.
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, it clearly seems that the movement of
people
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tend
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 to increase year by year. Russians and Persians had
highest
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the highest
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 movements
to
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in
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 the cities,
while
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 Indonesians had the least. Russia started the period in
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2000 with 20
million
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of
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people
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 moving, after that the
number
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 of Russians steadily increased in 2010
at
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 just over 40
million
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 and in 2015 reached 70
million
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. The
number
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 of
people
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 going to the city continued growing in 2020 with the expectation to reach over 80
million
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of
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migrants in 2025. Iran had begun the period between 2000 and 2005 with just below ten
million
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 of Iranians going to the cities,
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 the
number
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 significantly
growth
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grew
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 reaching 80
million
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 of Persians leaving the rural areas and projecting an increment of 85
million
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 in 2025. Indonesia was the nation with less migration compared with the other two. Started the period with 10
million
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of
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migrants and gradually increased the
number
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 until 2020 reaching 30
million
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of
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people
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 and forecasting the same
number
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 for 2025.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, million, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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