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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graphs demonstrate two trends in one certain country from 1920 to 2019. One is the ownership of washing
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machine
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machines
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,
refrigeraotor
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refrigerator
refrigerators
, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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. Another graph shows the differences
of
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 the number of
hours
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 spent on housework.
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, refrigerators rose the most significantly in
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this
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 nearly fifty years,
while
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 the possession rate of washing
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machine
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machines
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 underwent little change. As for vacuum cleaners, it went through a mild increase in its proportion where the households owned it. In terms of the weekly
hours
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 spent on chores had
an
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 smoothly decreasing trend.
To begin
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 with, the ownership ratio of households with
the
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washing
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machine
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machines
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 increased from approximately 0% in 1920 to 100% in 1980, which had the largest difference among the subjects.
Next,
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the percentage of households who owned vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 reached as well to 100% in 2000.
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, washing
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machine
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machines
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 didn't achieve 100% throughout these years, it remained in the range of 40% to 80%, which consists of the least difference. As
the
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home appliances became widespread,
weekly
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the weekly
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 time people spent on
houseworks
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housework
 changed as
followed
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. It
starts
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started
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 with 50
hours
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 per week in 1920,
then
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 it dropped to almost 10
hours
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 per week, which proves
the
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 technology saves our time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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