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As part of their education, students should spend a period of time living in another country to learn its language and culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s modern era, many believe that
students
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 should live in another
country
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 to enhance their language skills and culture.
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, some argue that it comes with financial and emotional challenges. I totally disagree with
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tuition
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tuition
 fees, accommodation and daily expenses,
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, which may not be affordable for all
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. To continue with drawbacks, being away from family and
country
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 can be emotionally difficult, it leads to
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 of loneliness.
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, homesickness can negatively impact
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their academic performance.
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,
students
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cook like their mothers, they may rely on
fastfood
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, which can be harmful to their health. The
proccess
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process
 of eating unhealthy foods may lead to
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 as obesity and a lack of essential vitamins,
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and nutrients
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 and reduce their energy levels.
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, despite these challenges, studying abroad offers several benefits. Some statistics show that
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 living in another
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 helps
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students
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 to learn faster, and it can boost the accent and fluency
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 and smoothly. It is the best way to learn
language
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 proficiently.
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,
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 abroad helps to create a global network among
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 through communication. It
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 positive impact
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 future job careers.
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,
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 alone daily life in another
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 them more open-minded and teaches
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 to be responsible for anything and solve problems easily on
thier
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their
 own. In conclusion, I completely agree that international education is the best investment for
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 to learn language,culture and
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 personal growth.

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Ensure your arguments are clearly supported with specific examples to better illustrate your points.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity and flow in your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid using phrases like 'to continue with drawbacks'. Instead, use more straightforward transitions for better coherence.
task achievement
You've presented both sides of the argument, showing good awareness of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion clearly outline your position, providing a clear structure to the essay.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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